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Quoted From BK
Look this is the apocalpse…coz u like my cock~on~yo~lips, tha flows ready to rip!//(1)
coz u the kinda guys who likes the dick...don’t get to close coz im ready empty the clique//(2)
throw a punch, u goda a fat lip…so do no tell me wat I can not see, coz you’re the definiton of a fake MC//(3)
your rymes decline wen u hear mine…my lyrics got vocabulary words u can not define//(4)
goda bat..i hit u in the spine, u fall down…u never saw that I was planning this…u r blind//(5)
im one of a kind…master mind murders through out the years…but still got respect from my prison pears//(6)
Its pretty clear…I got the 4-5 near, hate to see u in despair, so y don’t I assasin u while im here//(7)
but im not…coz it seems that u love me a lot, don’t fuck with a G, coz youll end up deceased//(8)
6 feet deep…that’s the depth you will see… listen to me, my lyrics murder any G but me//(8)
its reality…it goda be… jumped you once, and still you didn’t learn… who the fuck u think I be!//(9)
(Finish him)
Its ya murder…front page in the local magazine, respect me coz I own u, coz if u don’t these lyrics will be the truth//
coz youll soon see me on MTV inside a music booth…im da best in this game like base ball and babe ruth//(10)

mmmhmmmmm
No structure what so ever
Ok flow
Punches were weak....
No personals....
Overall.........5/20
Elevate some homie

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Quoted From 168
---------opener----
Its funny didn't check in jus "cut and pasted" his verse its prewritten...
no personals i asumme cuz its all recycled from a another site IR ima post this cuz its "bitten"

---continue---
u dont got a chance heres ^^ da PROOF OF THE KNOWN TRUTH
your gonna capture my rhyme bulettes in your PHONE BOOTH

this guy's an Actress, fuck handin u clips, spit rhymes that stick
u'd think he was a sick porn star the way he Demandin the dick

I’m ‘Taking Ya’ Down’ Like “Last Year’s Calendar”BK Come Hard?
This Kid Is ‘No Big Deal’ Like “Playing Poker With Just 10 Cards

------closer-------
to Curse-Ya-Spits And Have Ya *Heatin Ya Self Up* As If i Reversed-Ya-Clips...(verse)
Tribal will Keep A *Knife to The Middle Of ya Lyrics* So people will Know Why All ya Verses-Be-Split...

mmhmmmm
Thats a bit better
Punches hit harder
Structure was ok..kinda choppy
Flow was good...
Overall.........13/20

Vote-168
But peice of advice for 168
Dont do that ----Begginner----.... ----Finisher----...----Continue---- Shit
That makes the verse look like shit...
Thta style is so old... its annoying
But overall Good verse...Keep it up

BK...
You need mad elevation
Punches were weak...
All concepts were played...