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Old 01-03-04, 11:26 PM   #2
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From: Climbing a mesa
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That was beautiful. Sad at the same time, but beautiful none the less.
I felt like I wanted to believe in her.

The only thing that I didn't like was the repition of
"Every moment she gets weaker,
when all she wants is someone to believe her."

It did add to the "structure", but it took away from the "life" or "personality" of it all.

Very nice overall.
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