Yeah...Nice shit breh....A lil too long tho...But i think since its good to read, it doesnt make it bad....

U have good a good multie sense...I allso preffer to write my songs like this, But, After doing it so log and so many times...I got sick of it and fergot what was really important about writtin....

Vocab, Personaly, I didnt find anythin rong.....Some people will always vocab is a lil poor, wen really it isnt...

Nice piece...