C quip pretty much got this, just get rid of the bold words, and fix your structure, over than that you didnt do bad, some nice lines.
Mc tourment, that was horrible, how the fuck u manage to win 2 battles, no hate just statin the truth,
vote = C quip
hit this up with a honest vote
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=103845