ok firstly there seems to be too much reverb on yr vocals, which makes them get a lil lost considering the beat has alot of stereo separation on it, so take that off so ur vocals are in mono on the track. 2ndly its way too short to be a complete song. delivery was quite smooth n consistant.

so really:-

improve ur mixing techniques
make yr tracks longer, (more verses and a hook?)
and just generally keep at it, u seem like if u continue elevating u'd have good potential.

peace dunn

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