Flow is a little off in this writing.... The vocab is also limited cuz millions of people drop this type of writing per year.... U really need to try to put some nice wordplay in this writing.... I think wordplay will make all the difference in this piece... Dont worry about multi usage, because I think multies might mess up the flow in this piece....

Also, it seems like U were just rhyming words... U gotta work on tryna use some of the elements that CHRIST (98-6 record) posted.....

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