I pondered it for some time, and you are actually right. I shouldn't include any extra characters. But I'm not sure if I'd be able to pull it off entirely. I mean, the end where she is locked in the basement seems all the more foreboding knowing there is no way out, then she suffers from it and ends up being found. 'Course I had pictured her when she grows up to go off to college and have friends and whatnot. More narrative than anything else.

But yeah, I think it would be a lot better and more intimate to have only those two characters.

But this peice is scary. It's scary because while it may not be negresses and nazis, child abuse still happens these days. It's scary to other people knowing this happens. Knowing it could happen to their children. Knowing it has happened to their children. Knowing it has happened to them themself.

It scares me because not only can I imagine it from the abuser's perspective, I can also understand it too. I comprehend the pleasures of abuse.

And that kind of soul stealing scheiße scares the fuck out of me, personally.

Oh yeah... and uppin'.

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.