Pieces like could be interpretted as played..
But i guess its just how you bring it.
The way of writing you applied here makes,
You wonder..an an anxious to read on..
I reaches certain emotions within..like listening,
To your own story.
The fancy stuff was kept to a minimun, which..
In my opinion contributed to the overall emotional
appeal of the piece..great array of words,
Strings of visuals that come toghether as one,
& make the essence clear to see. Well written.
Also the short intermissions complimented the piece,
well..unlike alot of ppl who force them.
I guess you could say this was pure hearted,
Solid emotions written down without to much thought..
Which give this piece a pure an honest feel.
Never did i had the feeling it was a bunch of bullshit,
or overrated to intrigue the readers.
The last part of the piece, especially the last bar,
For me created the perfect ending..of a almost perfect piece.
This was a very enjoyable piece..
And i obviously give u respect for the clearly shown writing skills.