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Old 01-05-04, 06:44 PM   #3
MeNTiLL
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Nice drop Bruk ... GOod to see U back into writin' ... I was definitely feelin' the meanin' on this piece man ... Both stanzas were nice ... Imagery was dope ... Rhyme scheme was nice ... Flow was good and easy to follow ... The ender was dope man ... I was lovin' it ... Besides that ...

The bag boy asks “Paper or plastic for your two cans sir?”
Returning a smile and giving a “Its ok” wave for his answer

The phone she bought to be used “only for emergencies”
But clocks two hundred hours monthly on her gossip certainty

Those lines there were among my fav's in this piece also ... Keep writin' ur stuff man ... Only good things'll come ... Peace
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