Nice piece, I will attempt to break it down. But unfortuanately, it will be hard to do anything but awe at your work - your open mic skills surpass mine.

Pros: Your Structure was excellent. The rhyme scheme was excellent also. You rhyme twice at the beginning of each sentence, and once at the end with the next line, it flowed nicely.
A good choice of topic, unfortuanately it seems that most of rb has avoided this as they do not keep up with politics.

Cons: Went a little over the head in some areas, because you were speaking to metaphorically.

A global whistle, composed of missiles exists in the focal ring
Of journalists & attention-seekers with their lips on its opening

for example that. while it had a nice rhyme and ring to it, it was hard to grasp. I think i understand what you mean by a global whistle, but although i have a good vocabulary, I do not know what focal ring means. I do understand what your trying to get across in the second line though.

As its tune varies, the rude tarry in a flu that nervousness rids
Sadly, our grandparents gave birth to slews of conservative kids

personally i think that it would have rhymed better if you had said "nervously rids" and conservatives.. but your choice, still went ok.


Although my cons list is longer, don't worry, the pros far outweigh the cons. Great piece. keep up the good work, hope to hear more soon.