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Old 01-06-04, 12:03 AM   #3
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lol lok... i like the feeling thats always nice, but first off its kinda short... id try to go at least 10 lines. However i cant realy see much of a rhyming scheme goin on here... i think you should work on that a bit... my 2 cents...
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