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Quoted From Carl0s
Understand It Man...You Dont Want It With Me/
Cuz Your Rhymes make No Sense Like Punjabi Mc"// ~1~
You Fuckin With Me...Ill Make Sure That "Lame" Is Your Title/
Cuz With Raps Like Yours...You Should Singing On American Idol"// ~2~
And If This Kid Says I Suck At Rapping...Yo We Know Hes Wrong/
Cuz We All Know His Style Is Fruitier Than That Ash Kid From Pokemon// ~3~
Ill Fucking School You Bitch...Take Ya Ass To Detention/
I've Seen Your Raps And They Should Be In The Poetry Section// ~4~
You Blow Kid...In This Chapter Im Turning The Page/
Cuz You Probably Get Laughed At More Than A Comedian On Stage...// ~5~
And I Dont Gotta Put Jokes In My Shit To Make People Laugh/
All I Do Is Mention Your Name...Cuz Your A Joke And Thats A Fact// ~6~
Thats Why They Call Me "The Waiter"...Cuz Im Always Serving ellas.../
You Probably Suck So Much It Would Make Your Own Girlfriend Jealous// ~7~
Battling Me Your Straight Stupid...Its Like Bad For Your Health.../
People Aint Gotta Vote...The Laughing Speaks For Itself...// ~8~
Your Probably Saying "Fuck Why Did I Make That Call Out?" After I Accepted/
I Garentee You Read This And You'll Fucking Regret It// ~9~
And If You Really Want My Opinion...Ill Say Your Gay/
Cuz Your +Taking Polls+ And I Aint Talking Bout A Survey// ~10~

Straight
Punches were decent
Flow was ok...
Structure was horrible
Decent Verse...
Overall.......14/20

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Quoted From Verstyle
I’m assuming you like last place, and then a fucking gassed face
my advice...use alot more delete an backspace
to beat me odds are slim, more than anorexics on dexatrim
relapse your every whim, when I snap your neck and limbs
got you shook like a fault line, wishing you could halt time
put your comp in default, unable to assault mine
liquid sword show, slicing through your torso...gruesomely
send you to your eulogy, "half the man" you used to be
I know the way I word this, leaves you biting cuticles nervous
on purpose, I’ll send you to your own funeral service
so stay back, Resident? ...you're always gonna stay wack
cuz I slay cats, like chinese restaurants when I display raps
twist your head like the poltergiest, strangled with a mic device
resurrect your life like Christ, just so I can come and kill you twice
I'm always prevailin so every time you'll be failin
like trying to Crucify yourself, you won't get the last nail in

Dope verse...
Punches hit hard
Very amusing..Funny
Structure was better
Flow was good..
Dope verse.....
Overall...16/20

Vote-Verstyle
He came harder in punches
Props to ya verstyle....

CarlOs...come harder next time
And shorten ya lines down
Try to get better structure...
Keep it up.. you'll get better