you need to fix ya quality up man, some compression is needed on ya vocals i think, your quality made it sound like a radio freestyle or somethin. i read you only been rappin for 1 and half years, you pretty good tho man. parts of this song u sounded mad nice, some parts you sounded mad amateur aswell though, just gotta keep practicin n shit. some good shit though, you from manchester? im from runcorn, check out the track i posted on this forum if you get time, dunno if you heard of my crew antiheroes, we done shows with taskforce, riff raff etc

keep elevatin man! good stuff

later