Ill go ahead and leave something...

First off, you both are newby' s and it shows...need to elivate the vocab, on bothsides...

heres the breakdown individually..

Telekinetic, you need to upgrade your structure, your flows choppy, kinda hard to understand, like once verse goes really short and quick to rhyme then you rhym two words then try to rerhyme the quickly rhymed verse...too choppy for this site, good for toe -2- toe with a mic...

DEF-STAR-
you need to one up the punches, the ill kill you here and clap that don't mean shit, you gotta make the opponente feel belittled by something you see or sence, you cant be like "8/ COME ON DOG YOU CLAME THAT YOU SPITTIN SOME HEAT/
9/ BUT THE ONLY HIP HOP YOU DOIN IS WHEN I CLAP AT YOUR FEET/"(that a weak blow...need to elivate).....

VOTING TIME:
my vote goes to Def-Star, his structure was better, vocab was just as limited... but the blows were more crisp...this line did it for me....(WHEN I SPLATER BRAIN AND REALY MAKE YOU TELEKINETIC)

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MATCH.........GOT U



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if you was a child molest youd still get dick alot//
what is you confused cant member which team you be with//
i know you shirts old navy but your mouths on seamen//