ok smiley was ok but very newbish and played...
the bold has got to go..and the structure was way off
lines should be as even as possible...
u mentioned something about a crew and unless i completly missed it..i dont think he is in a crew...
seemd prewritn ............i could e wrong but it def...seemed prewritin..

street fame...
had better structure..was easier to read..
some played punches but some nice original punches as well
welll.......not played..maybe i just wasnt feelin some of your lines as much...
that first couple of lines was pretty good and is really what took it for me...

therefore
poll vote=street fame
seemed quite obvious to me