Nice piece here man ... Dope message in the verse ... Dope content ... Well written piece as a whole ... Had a good meanin' to it ... I was diggin' the rhyme scheme U used in this ... That made it more interestin' to read ... Flow was good and the verse was easy to follow as a read ... Nice job ...

& they're still children; they bicker forever, as the mill inside me skewers
To an uneducated state rivaling those of Bill O'Reilly viewers

Its luster is gone as clusters of fawns are shining in cages. .
that heed progress whilst "Elitists" take turns defining outrageous

"Why?!" do you ask, is a side of us masked & in debt to the self. .
Why are we jailing the "probabilities" that "might" threaten our health

Those were stand out lines of this verse to me ... Nice metaphorical meanings thru out this piece ... Some had to be thought about to understand ... But that was dope ... Once again nice piece here and keep writin' ... Peace