I'm a say It took this for better structure, for sure.

The punches were tighter, the wordplay was aight, and the flow was definately on mark.

Limitz...

Well, aside from the shitty format, you did ok.

I'd work on punching more...
And stop forcing your wordplay...
Some of that shit barely made sense.
Not everything has to be a, "like"...(meta)
And you certainly don't need to capitalize shit up in there.

Overall you didn't come bad, just need work, especially personal punching, even if it's just playing off his name.

You need to let us know in some way, shape, or form...
That this was meant for him and not some kinda pre-write.
I"mnot accusing you of anything, just saying when there are personals, it helps like a motherfucker.

Peace

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