This was a nice piece Sir ... Different concept ... Mad different ... I wouldn't of thought of nuthin' like that and that's dope man ... The flow of this was consistent thru-out ... It did lack in multi's but that didn't really affect the piece cuz it wasn't that long so U didn't need them to draw in attention so to say ...

The Plight Aroma, Like The Smell Of Death..
Filled The Air, As I Gasped For A Breath..

I liked those lines along with the first stanza the best outta this piece ... Nice job ... Keep writin' man ... Peace