whoa..this was tight..had me going..flow messed me up at some points..vocab could have been better..I liked the story..although in the middle..I started to question where where you going with it..the end was a shocker..it cleared up why he did what he did to her..overall this was a good peice..I give it a..ummm...7.9/10..stay up


btw..check out my latest open mic..death of a man..

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R.I.P. Bodie