I thought that the bars seemed too long for the rhyme scheme.
You had a decent flow...but the format seemed to make it elongated, if you see what I'm getting at. You had pretty good internal rhyming (the next step would be internal multies, they're super dope) and I appreciated that this wasn't all about saddam, because I was worried after reading the first line.

This was a pretty decent keystyle...with some tuning it could be a decent piece.

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