alright, well mic- a lot of your was good here, i dont like the ... after lines though, lose that, the open was kinda weak but it didnt suck, it was just kinda moderate, i didnt like the next line too much, next couple you had pretty weak punches, but it wasnt horrible, but your close was pretty good, strongest part of the thing, keep elevating

MCnookie - didnt like the // after lines, lose those, the open was really weak, need to work on that, the first 3 lines kinda sucked, use one sentence per line, dont stretch them out. your next couple lines didnt even really make sense and your close was one of the worst ive ever seen, that needs work, also too many links, nobody clicks on them anyway.

pretty weak battle, but it is pretty evident to me that the winner is micnificent