yea man this was dope, realy dope....

flow lacked at a few moments, seemed forced.....but the best aspect of this peice was the description and the emotion, you had a well defined character with unique traits.....thats good writing. was a bit short tho man, if you woulda made it longer, more interesting story, with a few extra aspects to the character, this would be even doper

return the favor

good peice