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Old 01-09-04, 08:40 AM   #2
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=) this was fantastic

the flow was really well put together, the only line where it fell off a bit was :
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. . . It's in their Nature . . Why are they at Fault for Cohering?

I don't like to use pauses at the beginning of lines because it doesn't work too well in terms of reading.
I will critique the rest later, as I am in class and now have to work.
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