good piece
but i dunno...seemed a bit lacking some how
the first verse outshone the others i think although some of the second was well written
imagery seemed to suffer in part due to the multies...which seemed a little forced
maybe it was just me

'no submission, because it got lost in translation
hard to be pencil sketched; the world is claymation
^probly my favorite line out of the whole thing

from the past pieces i've read this just seemd a bit lacklustre
a good read none the less..
check mne if possible..
#(it'll be on the second page by now )