Thread: Why I Fly
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Old 01-09-04, 03:23 PM   #3
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This was ok here.....structure was alright, could of been a bit better i think though....you should add some multies to this and your future pieces so they are better and so you elevate....try to up your vocab as well...but overall this was ok....keep at it.
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