this was a fairly decent battle. I hated that neither of you flipped the topic at all.
LM-Your flow was pretty good, and there was some use of internal rhyming that was fairly decent as well. Your structure was good, not great, but it didn't piss me off =). Your storytelling was good, really well developed and described. Overall, I would say this is a mediocre verse, but I haven't seen the rest of your work, so I don't know what you're capable of. I think with a bit of fine tuning here and there you could be really dope.
Taktik-Your storytelling wasn't as clear as LM's, but where you lacked clarity you had nice multies and a cool flow. Your wordplay was really good, I particularly enjoyed
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Yet the 4 Horsemen of Apocalypse were sucome to mere gelding....
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good work man, with improvement this could also be really dope.
vote-taktik