You faggot you thought i went aloft?
you are very soft
i should go and call you terry cloth
eat my dick whore
cuz that what you are
this faggot even gets kicked out of a gay bar
thought he was ill
you not even shit
thats why you wait till after i spit
eh.... flows poorly, simple rhymes, poor structure... Lackin PUnches. stuff like "you are very soft" "this faggot even gets kicked out of a gay bar" isn't really punches, and isn't effective in a battle. You need to elevate, that's all. Stay up.

ya wack...
compare ya rhymes to mold n i wouldnt know
had to spit some shit...i couldnt keep it cold
had ta heat things up...lyrically mind fucked
this kid said "weres the bird?" when i said "Duck!"
ripped in the last rd...i guess same in Rd.2
cuz u could be miles higher then me...
...i still be more elevated then u
spit wit wack lines..so ill decide to bit
blah blah blikity blar <-- even that cuz's fright
end this shit wit a killer bar...literally it killed u
now they aint gon be a rematch 3....
.........cuz ya literally died in rematch 2
Heh. Better structure. Your verse is just wittier... Nothin really great, but atleast You had better punches. "cuz u could be miles higher then me...
...i still be more elevated then u" Liked this one. . . Work on ya punches, some multies, and vocab. You used "literally" twice in the ending there... which came off sorta retarded. Nice Job overal, tho.


Vote: Celestial Dialect.... Better overall verse.... wittier, punches, just better.

Carson, you weren't far behind though, keep elevatin N maybe you'll get him in a 3rd round somewhere down the road

If ya could hit up this battle: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...18&pagenumber=1 it's be appreciated, thanks guys.