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Old 01-10-04, 02:00 AM   #2
SinfiC
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From: Reppin tha Northern Lights!
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There really wasn't much to this piece, your lines were short, the structure was good but it doesn't seem like you really know where you want to take your writing. I'm not really feelin the style either but keep writtin, you'll get it...

" WHO THE FUCK want drama best get at me"
with stuff like this, you might want to put "want's" instead
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