Your structure is really fucked, I hate reading paragraphs.

Make your lines more like ..

Back in the day we all had it rough
Where jobs weren`t good and food stamps weren`t enough

etc .. It makes it a lot easier to read.

The content was basic, just speaking on that real tip .. Nothing really eyepopping here, but as a whole, you got your point across ..

Try to think of a more creative, original topic ..

Keep writing and elevating ..