Heh. Yer avatar always gets my attention. So...quaint.

The piece is not. Though there is nothing wrong with quaint. This seems to carry on from your other pieces of recent time (i think). In the sense it leaks such pain and angst. In an unstructured, on the edge kind of way. Where it comes together depending on how you read it. And how many times you read it...

...it does tail off once or twice. Becomes slightly 'settled', but too settled in a way. Which therefore does loose some rythm. But for me, it adds something to the piece. The imperfection of feelings, pain, angst. I mean overall, it's a flaw. And the portrayl of those imperfections could be better done. But nonetheless it does depict the imperfections in a certain way.

Good piece.

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