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Old 01-10-04, 04:43 PM   #3
GeNiuS
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to meat market of rappers cuz im carnivorous


Huge potential with wordplay on that line if worded better..


cuz i spit heat fire like a dragon


however simple played line like this will hold you back....

this piece suffered horribly from a lack of flow...an multi's but was still decent..got the potential to elevate if you learn how to utilise the wordplay fully...
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