Been given the door but chose not to walk through
Humans are nothing more than mechanical robots
-liked the imagery in this section conveyed it across nicely..-

Everyone you meet, has a painted face

-also liked this line..lol...so damn simple but maybe im reading between the lines with the metaphorical meaning..if i aint thats hella nice-


I find it hard even to believe myself
The trust I once had has been layed on the shelf
-if worded better that line could have came across so nice.....but it was jus average..-

reapin' what's been sewed as time goes on
-again nice imagery...feel the rhyme scheme is feeling repetitive..



We were all made the same so who are you to condemn?
-an intelligient line..-

I'm like a sport, just tryin' to achieve my goals
-heh a simple simile...nothing like 1 of those to get the peeps interested again...haa-

Hook up a lie detector and watch us all fail
-now be real its human nature to lie lol...-

ok this wasnt much of a piece for quotables jus a couple of lines that stood as out as clever or deep..an still quite not sure bout what this is about...decent enough anyway tho..fel tthe abscence of multi's or something to lighten it up..felt very monotone when i was reading it..more like poetry til the last verse..

aight i no u peeped my other piece but i been told how battles get slept on in this site so can you please poll vote on this battle

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=105580

thanks if you do...jus repaying your feedback on my drop anyway...

..oNe..