^ He didn't choose this topic. . you imbecile
as Much as I don't agree with set topics, like that of Topical101, I feel you made the best of this. . The flow seemed comfortable and natural but it seemed like you struggled for words on occasions. .
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Ten years young & balding; God's light has dimmed & been curbed extinct
Pre-puberty, he deals with more facial hair than the women of Murder Inc.
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I didn't really like the second part of these two lines. . however, saying that, the first part was definately quotable . .
. . that aside, the lyrical content was superb and I have to say the ending had me in awe:
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Treason-sponsored, reasons squandered - thoughts profound but implausible
Alone & witless, while prone to sickness. . the sound is inaudible
Truthful & painful. . His story will, in part, deplete resurgance. .
'Cos a scream's volume matters not when it starts beneath the surface
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Definative nice piece. . keep it up, my pedigree chum. .