I really liked this piece for what it was, I wasn't sure what point was trying to be made but the flow and structure was on point. It didn't really sound like a flow tho, it sounded more like a poem to me but other than that it was good, take the advice of workin on other topics and let your mind develop the plot....keep writtin...take it Ez.....yo, and isn't this a chick who wrote this? (thats what I get from the pics of the grl on his/her screen name)