close battle....

good drops by both...

Ill - you had a enjoyable story about this poor guy who just doesnt do anythign with his life... flow and structure was very good - sometimes there were lines which were kinda jus fillers - but then there were lines that really got me - like

suicide on the mind but to lazy to pick up the knife

thats a great line - some good irony in this peice

DaO ::

i really felt your peice - there was a great sense of personal ties to the peice ... i love how you put in in your tense ("I") ... some great liens througout the peice - structure was a little off in parts but overall a great way off attacking the topic

vote : Da0

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