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Old 01-11-04, 06:47 PM   #19
t-west
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C Lo won this hands down...I will explain why.

dUrAsTiK- dawg, u need to elevate your game all around. DOnt take this is a dissin but sum advice. First of all, elevate ya structure. Add more meat to ya verse, your lines are way to short.

"Im the dealer n ur the player, I have much more experience
As I pick up my dice, I can see your body groes tense
C Lo hangs out his tongue, breathin hard like a bitch...
and his tail stops wagglin...Once my dice show four, five, n six!"

Dats whack i noe, but I just modified one of your opening lines and added more meat to it. It makes the bar much better and you can add much more in der.

I guess der is really no need for me to continue breaking this verse down as its pretty obvious that C Lo took this. Both of you keep on elevating.

/v - C Lo
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