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Old 01-11-04, 09:15 PM   #17
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This lil sissy challenged me//
Im gonna beat this bizarre animal......isnt it easy to see?//
When he steps to a mic.....he gets nervous and starts shakin//
He gets even worse when i step up......cuz his brain starts bakin//
Im real and i will remain fo real......but I think the cat is fakin//
This dude is definetly MEAGER//
People know im gonna win so they aint eager//
Im gonna plow over this tramp//
He aint gonna stop me from bein champ//
DONE that one kinda sucked
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couple bars ok....................................short on other parts.........
not much flow in this.............................................. ..
aight............................................. ........5/10......................
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Thats damn right i challenged you, now im gonna scavenge you,
This bitchs's unknown, so nobody looks for the body when i drown you,
I put yo white ass on the stove, and then i try to brown you,
It's like getting caught by the police, they cuff and put you face-down too
because this cannibal is an animal, and i eat people on the annual,
This rhyme is a manual, to all you future rappers,
Dont battle me without figuring out the factors
cuz if you down you get mowed down with a tractor,
Mutual benefactor, when i shove you in a nuclear reactor,
you will be dependant like steven hawkings chiropractor,
Now that i merked, and worked this little bitch and gone berserk
Now come backwith some skillz and known, like this style has shown,
cuz i just put out ya motherfucking tombstone
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aight^structure was off.....................................decent verse...
ok punches and personals........................................
overall nice wordplay and mutis......................................aight.. .
overall.............................7/10....................aight................
vote/R.T.
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