Even tho ur topic is played out...I still like it. For sum reason I always enjoy these pieces...becuz unlike of the heads here, he atleast expresses wat appears to be his true feelings.

Decent vocabulary. Good enough in my eyes, dunno how others will see it. Flowed very nice. Screw structure and that crap cuz this could very well be an audio so It all depends on how it flows. Umm...not much I can really say...It seems imcomplete...I didn't really like the last line, doesn't go with the rest in my opinion. Overall, decent piece. Keep Elevating.