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IP:
Great Collabo...
Sarcasm...your verse was very wel lwrittin a nice free verse...
The rhyme scheme was good rythem to read was nice as well
some nice lines and vocabulary...overall you made a good impression for the reader
Deacon...you had a more poetic aproach to this...but it still flowed nicely because of the lines bein shorty made the rhyme scheme easier to flow. the picture described was very unique a lot of good lines and expressions well done
Over all you 2 wrote on a very unique base..the title for instance was rare...and the concept was nicely done
Keep it up.
If you's have time hit up something in my sig...thanks
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