well...the first couple verse wern't two great..was a bit of a mamouth to read through..nuthin really stood out to much..just your averages diss's

but

the last verse had me laughin out loud..lol some funny shit..no hard hittin punchs just straight funny shit...you shudnt of made this so long...lol hardly anyone will read the whole thing...

id say fix the structure n work on gettin the humor in with punchs

overall

good job..but nothing special