Myster

IN THIS BATTLE YOU A RATTLE AND I KNOW THAT U SHOOK
UR RHYMES SOUND LIKE SHIT OUT A NURSERY BOOK/
Not a bad opening...
JUST LOOK I KNOW UR ENLISTED~ AS THE LISTED ~ON EVERYONES HITLIST/
U BITCHEN JUST LISTEN
I CAN HERE YO ASS SCREAM ~SHITTIN YA LIFE LIKE A PIGEON/
Hmm....not the greatest
WITH YA GIRL IN THE KITCHEN...MOANIN AND GROANIN... WISHIN
THAT IT WAS U IN THE WINDOWS REFLECTION/
BUT U THE ONE REFUSIN TO GET A AIDS INSPECTION
HOWS REJECTION//
Not a very good punch
NAW FUCK IT HOW IS A MURDA FUCK DETECTION
BITCH NOBODY CARES/
IM OUT THIS BATTLE WIT VOTES MAKIN ME THE HEIR
Blah....not the greatest closer

Myster you need to work on ya punches...fix ya struct and work on ya flow. I didnt know which lines were wich


Listed

see, im back in this. and now i gots to educate
your punkass cause from jr. high you didn't graduate
If thats a personal its a good opening
i just kick it like this, see you panic and drown
slap back your wack rap attack and lay it down
lay off the multis, they mean shit
now listen real close fool, i'm bout to hatch my plan
i'll pronnunciate slow so you can understand
Not really a punch
see i might be new, and yo, i aint no felon
but still i'm bustin' back, shootin' lyrical venom
Work on ya punches
my shit says 0-1, and just about to be even
i say mysterioso has issues and about to be leavein'
Dont get it...
feels good, don't it G. gettin' merked like this
i'll do you worse than that fool ILLunatic did
Who did what to Ill, dont get it
and, check this fool, you see, i already won
DQ'ed like a mug, but i'll finish for fun
Whys he gon get dq'd?...wack
the rules say 15 lines and no less, a fuckin' easy amount
come back and try again when you learn how to count
Finally..i decent punch


Overall - Listed....he won this battle wit 2 punches...it was very close because alot of his stuff didnt make sence but it came down to him winning

both of you work on ya punches

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