Thread: I. Keep. You.
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Old 01-13-04, 08:52 AM   #5
Calisto
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You shouldn't put disclaimers like that in front of peices like this it makes people expect shit... which this wasn't

Flow worked surprisingly well for a peice that was created from such pure emotion... generally speaking things that are from raw emotion lack poetically, this didn't. There were a few places I coudl have seen soem better vocab or structure changes that could have been placed better but in the long run it didn't take away from the peice. The only thing that took away from this peice was the length, people on these sites rarely read long peices, and this one was repetative in it's length. I felt sometimes liek oyu were saying the same things over and over again. But that's what you do when you're in pain, focus on a few points and they come together to cause you to purge your feelings, in this case on RB. Over all nice drop an I hope it helped you to get your feelings out. Keep your head up, peace
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