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Old 01-13-04, 12:57 PM   #1
Telekinetic
Poetic Justice
 
Posts: 327
What am I doing wrong

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I think my verse is creative. Still people say this is weak or on the verge of weak what the fuck insnt weak to these people
Here is my verse vs B. rantis tell me what is wrong in detail please



This kids shook like a quake cause I know he can't stand this
B.rantis is new to RB.........but see you just prey like a mantis (praying matis)
Your a 19 year old newb alive now but about to be dead
This is new to me too, I don't normally battle Special ED
You got no referrals, yea really nobody would unless they was insane
Cause just the lines above shattered you like a window I bring the pain (window pain)
Im rippin veins an arteries you haven't even began to scratch the surface
You're just a freeloader on this sight uppin post counts your only purpose
I just ended this guys amazing 5 post career with 10 lines that I wrote
Shit I didn't even have to throw any punch lines cause this kids the joke
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