Good idea but...

My mind was progressin'..ahem..excuse me, class is in session,
On how to handle my new obsession, achieveing O.M legends,
The though of it had me stressin', Started with "Desperation",

^^That part flowed pretty well...but...

Writtin by Domain 9, you could see his respect for Bruk in each line,
Made my heart welt, so though-out and deeply felt, this must of been a sign,
Because for this, I read every written legend, and they all stayed in mind,

^^When you moved to that it just didn't flow off the opening section...

Take out senseless words and sure maintain the content but don't forget about the flow and rhyming structure ay...Keep at it mate...Hit my piece up ay...Pz...

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