Island: I enjoyed your verse a lot. usually i try to give much more negative feedback than positive, just to elevate the writer, but its going to be hard here. Very good spit.
I have a little bit of a different perspective about witty lines though.. most people seem to think they are funny but not hard hitting, i think that the whole point of the wittiness is to get a point across, and therefore they are hard hitting .. when worded right. it seems that you have accomplished this somewhat in your verse. take the first line for example: Fuck bringin head... this kid ain even spittin warm.,
Mystery, ~, murdera, wackness in 3 different forms. i think that this line was witty, humorous, and hard hitting. because - you could have just as easily had a funny line, which did not involve him so much... and it would not have been as hard hitting. but the fact that, you used his name, and broke it down in a funny way, made it that much better. I liked your style this time for the most part..short and sweet, not short and crappy. Some problems with your verse: the closer was definitely a problem, i could not even figure out how it rhymed.. i know you did it on purpose but it still hurt your verse. Some of your lines werent as witty of were played & should have been taken out and replaced. like the next to nothing line. but its all good.

Mystery~Murdera: a decent verse. nothing really spectacular here.
problems: i dont like ur structure anymore. it seems in some parts like its not needed. you should look at them and see if they really were necessary to be there. Your punches were a little lacking i thought. a lot of the personals could have been turned into witty phrases or punchlines to make them stand out & hit harder. you seemed to just state the facts in some places, like right here:

Its flowin - u dissolve first, and I wanted to mention…
Av led Merk Squad but had to battle 13th 13 times…
…………………………….just to get the admission!!

try to make those things into a punch and they are much better to read & laugh at the one aimed at, or say "damn, that was ill."

Thats all i will say this time. PLEASE READ THE EXPLANATION. i didnt bullshit it like most voters probably do, just to get the line limit... i gave legit feedback and hope that it will be followed, otherwise theres no point to feedback...

VPTE - ISLAND