Thread: Broken fruit
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Old 01-13-04, 10:38 PM   #2
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this is nice... very cool. Very good imagery.
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cheaters way out -showered my thoughts but I'm no coward
Ill clutch the stem until my hands bleed and then eat the flower
^^ Liked this line

It flows well, good rhymes & all. Very vague, though. Can't really tell exactly it's about, like it's only scratching the surface. But I sense the inner torment and bleak outlook in it.

Overall, I like verses like this, and I liked this one.
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