deep piece, i like readin shits like this, something that will make you feel something...
tho vocab wasn't the strong point, as you said, your scheme, inners, content made up for it with class.. if there is anything i would have to pick on it would be the length of the piece, i don't know about you, but i think if i was going to commit suicide, and i left a note, it would probably convey more of a reason for the act also...
8/10, good drop

if you could check my piece, "Hell", and give some constructive(emphasis on constructive) criticism, it would be most appreciated...
Split