i was definately feeling this, and your i understand the dillemma with the structure. Your vocab was on point. Deepness was was the shining characteristic of the piece,
was hard to get it to flow in my head, but if you wrote it to lace it over a beat, its hard to put it on paper so that it flows, understandable.

7/10 good drop

if you could return the favor, and critique my latest piece "Hell", with some good constructive feedback, i would appreciate it