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Drop Of Genius
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IP:
Firstly....fix the structure, if it aint structured out well it puts people off readin it.
It should look like this:
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^^Or as close as possible to that.
And also dont put // at the end of your verses....not many people like that coz it looks noobish.
For the first two lines I woulda put:
I'm a scream out until I cant breath out
Til my bloodcells get up + move house
^^Notice the structure and no //'s
Another thing would be up your vocab....but that cant be taught, just be creative.
Here you have the framework for somethin dope it just needs a bit of fine tuning
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HARRY R.I.P
1940 - 2002
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