good ish..............your elevatin bro, this drop kept me readin, solid drop...........you have good wordplay, this drop was deep, a nyce rhyme scheme.....throwin up sum hott multis, you stayed on topic.....tha hook was aight..........tha only things i notice that you could correct is tha hook.....and redundancy....i undastand that tha gurls eyes are dope....but you mentioned them in about half your bars and you mentioned holding her alot too............but thats just my opinion, nyce drop playboy, i expect to see more of this in tha future, peace, 1

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